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Who forms structures amidst the unknowable
Wherein the eternal dialogues lay?
Fanciful constructions of the essence
Existing in philosophical garbs
Dressed in purple, but tattered and torn
Bereft of their own value

Dialogus Aeturnum
Creating infinites through the subsets of infinite
Thus The descriptors of eternity, the finite ad infinitum
And the narrowing perception of that which transcends
The [in]finitude of attributes
An amorphous coalescence of forms

Nay,

The conscious realisation of forms
An inseparable totality; an amorphous coalescence
Yet perceived
By the narrowed filtration of perceptions
To the angularities that govern
[in]sensibility
This is a poem I had written a fair while ago (around August last year), but hadn't uploaded. I've now considered sharing it however, having not posted anything in a while, and hopefully this manages to inspire someone or otherwise hold interest, as I've tried to evoke a certain depth of meaning via the coalescence of wording.

Thanks for any feedback in advance.
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phoenixleo Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2009
abstract and i love it!!
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welfareleech Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009   Traditional Artist
I find this rather enticing a work, with the use of box brackets a welcome choice for the dissection of multiple meanings as if to manifest something of a dualistic nature. Very good, I was unaware you wrote poetry.
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cosmicbound Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009
Ah, glad you enjoyed it, appropriately, too. Indeed, poetry is another way of directing my creativity -- I have quite a few poems that I haven't shown publically.
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welfareleech Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2009   Traditional Artist
Very nice. I would look forward to seeing them [if] ever you were to bring them to light.
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cosmicbound Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2009
Pending on personal judgement as to their quality, I might. Otherwise, you are welcome to request that I share a few with you.
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welfareleech Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2009   Traditional Artist
Ah, of course.
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mystical-machine-gun Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2009
"Thus The..."

Was the capitalisation of the word "the" intentional?

That aside, I like this very much. It's not immediately penetrable, which is good, because it encourages the reader to think carefully about it.

:+fav:
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cosmicbound Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2009
Glad you enjoyed it, in a subtle way as intended.

Interestingly, I don't recall intentionally capitalising the 'The', but reading it now, it does seem to fit, with some agreeable interpretations.
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mystical-machine-gun Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2009
I can't see any of the 'agreeable interpretations' for myself, although I don't doubt your intentions.
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cosmicbound Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2009
I could share them if you'd like, but it depends upon how much you think that spoils you (or the poem, for that matter), if at all.
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mystical-machine-gun Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2009
No, I'd be pleased if you could share them. :aww:
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cosmicbound Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009
Ah, very well. :) Wait, I will note them to you, so others can interpret the poem for themselves. ;)
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mystical-machine-gun Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009
Thank you very much. :)
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cosmicbound Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009
You are welcome. :)
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Formor Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2009
The use of [brackets] emphasizes various meaning and [un]meanings throughout the poem. Excellent work!
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cosmicbound Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2009
[Many]Thanks, Adam[Formor]!
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Formor Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2009
You're welcome :D
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soloact-the-bard Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
:clap: B-)
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Etheryn Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
hard words put togheter into non-sence sentences? i find no point in this poem more than the difficult words make it look 'cool'
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cosmicbound Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
No.
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Silva-Zodiac Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2009
Very interesting. Commenting on the philosophies and science of eternity is no easy task, but you conveyed the fundamental inability of humanity to understand the All very well. You also used the squared brackets in a pretty original way here, allowing for a double meaning.

I really have to disagree with Dahnza because I can see that you were commenting on the colour purple, which dominates the picture. Purple is also considered, symbolically and esoterically, a very important colour in philosophy and art. And the last part, a comment on the aesthetic value of beauty, is fitting in a response to visual art. So I believe those four lines in the first stanza do line up with the picture.

Great piece. It's going in my favourites.
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cosmicbound Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
Thank you for sharing your thoughts on the piece, I'm quite glad you appreciated it. You grasped some key aspects of it quite well indeed.
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Silva-Zodiac Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2009
Not a problem. :)
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Dahnza Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
They go great together, and poem thoroughly draws a question, then an answer, although the top stanza's last 4 lines don't really fit it =)
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cosmicbound Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
Thank you. The top stanza is very much like a key for the meaning of the rest, though.
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Sashona Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2009
Nice job with the poem, dude :) An the picture is great as always :)
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